Your Name:________________________________
Writer’s Name:_____________________________
Assignment:________________________________
Workshop Instructions: You are responsible for giving feedback to two group members. Read through your peer’s paper. Note passages you feel are important or that you don’t understand; write questions/comments in the margins, etc. Then, fill in the form below, and make sure you are THOROUGH in your response. Write in complete, clear sentences. Do not comment on grammar or punctuation. Repeat this process for your second peer’s paper. Once everyone in the group has finished filling out the Revision Response Forms, spend the remainder of class discussing each person’s paper. Make sure you give your Revision Response Forms to your peers at the end of class so that they can use your feedback as they revise.
1. Discuss whether or not the writer has fulfilled the assignment. Note any parts of the assignment that have not been addressed or are incomplete.
2. Is the writer’s description of the advertisement vivid? Can you visualize the images, text, layout, etc. without seeing the actual ad?
3. Does the paper maintain a clear and consistent focus? Does the body of the paper consistently focus on analyzing the advertisement? Note those areas where the focus of the paper shifts.
4. Is the writer’s analysis effectively written? Has the writer broken down the essay into all its parts, discussing its context (author, audience, message), and the rhetorical appeals used? Note those areas where the analysis could be made stronger.
5. Is the paper effectively organized? Note any areas where the paper does not progress logically from point to point. Also, look to make sure ideas are well organized within paragraphs. Suggest ways to organize the information more effectively by pointing out paragraphs that contain more than one idea, or areas that might need transitions to make the progression of ideas clearer.
6. Note those parts of the paper that are particularly effective or engaging—paragraphs that drew you in, ideas that have been excellently supported or explained, ideas that are clearly connected to other ideas with effective transitions, etc.