REVISION RESPONSE FORM

Workshop Instructions: You are responsible for giving feedback to two group members. Read through your peer’s paper. Note passages you feel are important or that you don’t understand; write questions/comments in the margins, etc. Then, fill in the form below, and make sure you are THOROUGH in your response. Write in complete, clear sentences. Do not comment on grammar or punctuation. Repeat this process for your second peer’s paper. Once everyone in the group has finished filling out the Revision Response Forms, spend the remainder of class discussing each person’s paper. Make sure you give your Revision Response Forms to your peers at the end of class so that they can use your feedback as they revise.

1. Discuss whether or not the writer has fulfilled the assignment. Note any parts of the assignment that have not been addressed or are incomplete.

2. What do you believe is the writer’s thesis or controlling idea? Choose a sentence within in the paper that communicates the thesis and write it down, or write the thesis in your own words. If needed, suggest ways to make the thesis or controlling idea stronger/clearer.

3. Does the paper maintain a clear and consistent focus? Note areas of the paper that are not clearly related to, or do not seem to develop the thesis or controlling idea. Make suggestions for unifying unrelated or disconnected areas, or suggest parts of the paper that might be taken out.

4. Note any ideas that have not been given enough support with details and specific personal or textual examples. When possible, suggest ways to provide that support—referencing texts, giving a personal example, etc.

5. Note any passages that were unclear or ambiguous, and do your best to explain why. When possible, tell the writer what you think he/she might mean, and suggest ways to make the passage clearer.

6. Is the paper effectively organized? Note any areas where the paper does not progress logically from point to point. Suggest ways to organize the information more effectively, or point out areas that might need transitions to make the progression of ideas clearer.

7. Note those parts of the paper that are particularly effective or engaging—paragraphs that drew you in, ideas that have been excellently supported or explained, ideas that are clearly connected to other ideas with effective transitions, etc.